triangle—soup: Hi, this is my first

triangle—soup submitted:

Hi, this is my first redraw, critique appreciated - I want to learn!

So I did my best to try and fix her blank expression and twisty spine - I know this pose is vaguelly possible, but the extreme nature of it bothered me a little, cos it looks like she’s straining to show bum cleavage and boob cleavage at the same time. Instead I tried to follow le-mec’s video about suggesting rather than showing everything at once and tried to make her pose a little more naturalistic?

I like this redraw quite a lot.  It’s both sexier and more natural.  And it’s more enticing with her looking over her shoulder at us.